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    dots Submission Name: you lookeddots
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    Author: allmine
    ASL Info:    25/chick/your nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 33/69/45
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 904
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    dotsyou lookeddots
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    you looked into her heart
    and saw your own reflection
    you looked into her eyes
    and saw all her pain
    you looked at her body
    and saw all the scarlett hearts
    you listned to the words
    she whispered from her lips
    "I will never forget you,
    and I will always love you"......




    Submitted on 2007-03-11 13:32:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      even though this is really short its straight to the point and really sad but i like ur wording. adding this to my favs
    | Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      i like how its a reflectioin of the guy, not just a characterization of the girl.... it's really neat... really good piece, keep up the good work

    rapius
    | Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by rapius | [ Reply to This ]
      This swet n straight to the point....good choice of words to desribe what was going on and feeling I really like the last part

    "you listned to the words
    she whispered from her lips
    "I will never forget you,
    and I will always love you"......"


    it make u think did somthing bad happen or somthing like dat....

    well hope to year from ya and keep up the good work.


    max
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    lil'mix
    | Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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