Fairy Tale

Author: rachel gless ASL Info:    23/f/mx Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 68 /89 /37 Words: 81

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Fairy Tale

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Our love has come to spread its glow through haunted valleys and sorcerer souls We've been through battles Our love as sword and in the night it didn't get lost It shocks mean witches and evil gnomes it is too strong more than anyone could've known Our love has broken a spell or two it wouldn't die with the strongest brew Fairies have blessed us with magical spells to keep fighting and winning until the very end

Submitted on 2007-03-11 15:50:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Sorry, Lord of the Rings/ D&D writing leaves me cold. Orcs and goblins and stuff....nah. But ( and this is a big but ) if you are proud of this and writing it makes you happy, then you are amongst the greatest writers in the world. Keep on doing what makes you feel good, and what makes you feel like you are connecting with the world through verse. Ben Gunn.

| Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by Ben Gunn | [ Reply to This ]

This is pretty good I like the way this write came together Be careful of forcing your rhyme as it times it seems like that was happening I am not saying this is a bad write Im just saying if you let the rhyme came naturally then your write will then flow perfectly Great Job Im looking forward to reading more from you God Bless Ron Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron

| Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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