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Fairy Tale

Author: rachel gless
ASL Info:    23/f/mx
Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 68 /89 /37
Words: 81
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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it is a methaphoric mixture of fantasy and love. hope you enjoy it!

Fairy Tale

Our love has come
to spread its glow
through haunted valleys
and sorcerer souls

We've been through battles
Our love as sword
and in the night
it didn't get lost

It shocks mean witches
and evil gnomes
it is too strong
more than anyone could've known

Our love has broken
a spell or two
it wouldn't die
with the strongest brew

Fairies have blessed us
with magical spells
to keep fighting and winning
until the very end

Submitted on 2007-03-11 15:50:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Sorry, Lord of the Rings/ D&D writing leaves me cold. Orcs and goblins and stuff....nah.

But ( and this is a big but ) if you are proud of this and writing it makes you happy, then you are amongst the greatest writers in the world.

Keep on doing what makes you feel good, and what makes you feel like you are connecting with the world through verse.

Ben Gunn.
| Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by Ben Gunn | [ Reply to This ]
  This is pretty good
I like the way this write came together
Be careful of forcing your rhyme as it times it seems like that was happening
I am not saying this is a bad write Im just saying if you let the rhyme came naturally then your write will then flow perfectly
Great Job
Im looking forward to reading more from you
God Bless
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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