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    dots Submission Name: Avaritia (Third Deadly Sin)dots
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    Author: Syn
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 115/136/83
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       Third in the Seven Deadly Sins set. This one is Greed.
    Those sent to Purgatorio for greed were forced to kneel upon a hard slab of stone and recite the examples of avarice and their opposing virtues.


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    dotsAvaritia (Third Deadly Sin)dots
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    kneel upon the stone
    the virtues shall atone

    littered money tints the sky
    i want it all, i don't know why
    scattered millions in my mind
    enough to make the sun go blind

    kneel upon the stone
    the virtues shall atone

    (((please just get up off the floor
    you filthy money-grubbing whore)))
    if Franklin weren't so easy to adore
    that voice would be harder to ignore

    kneel upon the stone
    the virtues shall atone

    so i smile and i grin and say:
    'i know more is to come my way'
    and yes, i like this dream the best
    sin of excess, just like the rest

    kneel upon the stone
    the virtues shall atone


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      i remember this deadly sin series.
    im slack for not having come by sooner to find this installment.


    to be honest im not sure i like the rhyme in this piece. i dont know. it somehow seems to belittle the whole thing.

    though i was a fan of the refrain you had there about kneeling on the stone/atone.

    atonement=at-one-ment

    greed. i guess it could well be deadly. and not just greed for money either.
    perhaps it was greed that caused eve to eat that 'apple' back in the garden of eden... greed that she would be equal to god... greed for knowledge... hmmm...

    im not so sure that this person on this slab of stone will gain their entry to heaven...? there seems to be a lack of opposing virtue in this piece

    i guess its easy to be sidetracked when you want to be though... perhaps for some heaven isnt lure enough...
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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