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    dots Submission Name: Silence Stilldots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSilence Stilldots
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    The corpses are lined across the street
    Bleeding their worries away
    raining sorrow, their wounds refreshed
    with hope for what's behind

    I hear their voices
    silence still...
    the horrors no longer dominate!

    Their ghosts will forever rule
    Our dreams, fears, and prehaps hopes
    So live, says I

    [Freit trains will now stop and
    take away these people
    to a place where they will
    feel at home]

    So live! says I
    Live...so that I may die instead




    Submitted on 2007-03-11 17:52:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was an eerie piece that was well written. I think i understand it as that in death they live. "their ghost will forever rule". I see it as in death they will be at peace in their new home. And you wish that instead of them going it could be you. I could be wrong but this is the way it's portrayed in my head. I love the 1st stanza, it's imagery is my favorite.
    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is cool. i like the messege that they Live!

    "I hear their voices
    silence still...
    the horrors no longer dominate!"

    i lke how its sacrificed so they could live and leave.

    peace
    Aylin
    | Posted on 2007-05-05 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      is that last line from a famous poet? just seemed rather familiar. But it was overall good. the imagry could be better, though.

    ~orange
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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