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    dots Submission Name: Carolyn, I Am Away From Youdots
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    Author: Guernica
    ASL Info:    17/male
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 77/114/67
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCarolyn, I Am Away From Youdots
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    Carolyn, I am feeling all broken
    Like the caked-dry sole of a shoe
    Tossed harshly aside in the fray and the fire
    Carolyn, I am away from you.

    And Carolyn even the doctors are dying,
    Their faces are swollen and blue
    In the brown, leather garden that reaches the river
    Where, freezing and frozen, stands you.

    And they asked me if you jumped in,
    And it's something I know you'd not do
    But they ask if you tried to end your life
    And I cannot speak for you

    So I'm sleeping tonight in uneasy confusion
    You're no longer the girl that I knew
    No this time apart has been deadly
    Carolyn, I am away from you.




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      i liked this and i liked epic poem.. i just like the way you write. im jealous. and do not be quick to assume that i deserve any praise at all. you dont know. no offense. i know that sounds [censored]y but seriously...you dont.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      An interesting Poem. I had to make a comment on yours, seeing as you made such a charming one on mine. A nice poem, very well done. But, a proof as to what happens when God is not around. Sorry, but I have had my 'best friend' try to commit suicide without him, and have had two that did. Oh, and what a mess we would make out of our lives if we were doing the driving!

    But still, all in all, you are a very good poet.
    | Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by Larkbird | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very beautiful. It's sad and simple and sounds almost innocent.
    Favorite.
    I'm sorry.
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by awastedsky | [ Reply to This ]


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