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    dots Submission Name: under the umbrelladots
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    Author: kissmystars
    ASL Info:    20/F/NY
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 4/5/7
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsunder the umbrelladots
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    Nothing is everything no one can know.
    It's not north or east or found in the clouds.
    Order and honesy have no where to love
    like nomads. In foreign gloom, I have found
    that most tombs are empty of soul.

    Rain is harsh and painful if felt through
    flaming clothes. Tracks of train roads lay
    down to exchange savaged for manufactured goods.
    We are not alone but fall and crack
    too quickly before the dawn arises to live.

    Sleep isn't final though most will not see light.
    Human needs find pleasure in seeking truths
    and senseless fads. Leaps of faith end in
    bleeding keys and failing meek beats.
    Trees and a melody rest in your infinity.




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    ||| Comments |||
      You did a very good jobn with this
    To me you are describing how a lot of us Humans refuse to look at other forms of life on the Earth to help us move forward
    I believe a lot of us are stuck in this human idea that we are better then other living breathing things on the Earth
    What you say is so true
    A tree can live for Hundreds of years enjoying the Earth and her beautiful view
    Why cant we????
    I believe the answer is simple in the fact we are too busy trying to be like everyone else instaed of studying other life to learn their secrets
    Great Work!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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