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    dots Submission Name: Cinematicdots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    I read thes open spaces,
    As if I've seen them all,
    Movied them different places,
    In cities and shopping malls,
    Formed alliances with doubt,
    But doubted with trust,
    Conjured pure thoughts,
    From impure lust,
    Helped problems from,
    And Problemed the solutions,
    Threw away peace,
    To make war resolutions,
    And proof them,
    From loosened bolts,
    And Jolts in the plan,
    So I'd waste your time,
    So you could know who I am,
    Ask questions,
    Turn away before the answer,
    Query on emails,
    But then ignore the answer,
    I'd send the messenger,
    Just to have him shot,
    Just for your attention,
    I'd give you all I've got.

    Submitted on 2007-03-12 09:44:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really appreciate the way the lines tumble and trip over each other like the distracted thoughts of our minds. the way each line walks on the coat tails of the one before it presents the piece with a chainmail feel interconnected.

    well done

    | Posted on 2007-04-23 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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