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    dots Submission Name: Amnestydots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsAmnestydots
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    Tonight, I want you,
    To teach me how you fight,
    But still stay so strong,
    How you lose your way,
    But still know right from wrong,
    Tonight, I want you,
    To teach me how to move along,
    Tonight, I want you,
    To teach me what do I do,
    When I all my trust,
    Is put wholly in you
    And all that trust,
    You refuse to give back,
    Tonight, I want you,
    To teach me how to ask,
    How you lose your way,
    But still know right from wrong,
    Tonight, I want you,
    To teach me how to move along
    When your faith in me is gone.




    Submitted on 2007-03-12 09:48:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Huh, this was interesting.
    It was some what confusing
    You want to become better or worse?
    (This is probably my fault.)

    I like your choice of words, it's simple but nice.
    'I want to be/teach me, but you can't' kind of theme. I'm guessing.

    I liked it, I liked the ending alot too.

    'To teach me how to move along
    When your faith in me is gone.'

    Thanks for sharing.

    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]


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