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    dots Submission Name: Last Breathdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLast Breathdots
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    It was the last breath, wasnt it?
    When he whispered your name,
    It kept you awake all night,
    It drove you insane,
    Your parents saw it all,
    But they wouldnt complain,
    But little did you know,
    It would fall to vain,
    So Id lay low for a while,
    And theyd stay idle,
    Little did they know,
    Hes a traitor disciple,
    Hed breathed his last breath,
    But took back what hed spoken,
    And so you yourself lay there,
    As someone broken.
    Hed breathed his last breath,
    But in fact, he had two,
    So here then I come,
    With my last breath for you...




    Submitted on 2007-03-12 09:49:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem feels like you wrote it for some one. it will forever be fiction if you didn't give it to her.
    I like rhyming pattern but I think you use a bit more polish.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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