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    dots Submission Name: Waltz With Wolvesdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWaltz With Wolvesdots
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    To waltz with wolves,
    Is a fair game,
    But with a grey fox,
    It is not the same,
    Cunning and smooth,
    Flawless to the tee,
    Its a dance,
    That can go on endlessly,
    Inside of your heart
    Or at least if you would let it,
    Then youd learn the steps,
    And youd never forget it,
    But to learn to dance,
    With a grey fox,
    Is a type of training,
    To keep under lock,
    Because you can learn it,
    But only it alone,
    Because intentions and desires,
    Then are outwardly shown,
    Its a fair game,
    When you waltz with wolves,
    And I would forget,
    Every step,
    I learned, if I could...




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      I like the rhythm in this poem, I thnk it reads like an old folk song, but you kinda lose me at the end. I have read it silently and aloud and I think line 20 should read (are then ourwardly shown) maybe its just me.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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