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    dots Submission Name: Perfect Murderdots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 550
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsPerfect Murderdots

    Three cheers for the inexperienced,
    And two for the game,
    And everybody knows now,
    Who’s on the wall of shame,
    So pack it in, pack it in,
    And see who’s showed up,
    Because any restraint you had,
    Has just been blown up,
    So with you accusing eyes,
    You criticize, and spread lies,
    So then you should be wise,
    Adhere these words,
    Out of everything spoken,
    Very little his heard,
    If you say the right things,
    Hardly anyone few cares,
    But say something that hurts,
    And their ears will be there,
    And then so could a gun,
    To heat up the air,
    But words are more,
    Dangerous than bullets,
    Point the barrel,
    Find the trigger and pull it,
    And then all of a sudden,
    BAAM!! POP!! and POW!
    Nobody will think,
    Of you the same now,
    Imagine your victim is now
    Riddled- full of holes,
    And the forensics
    Are searching him cold,
    But there’s no rifling,
    On a “bullet” they can’t find,
    Because emotional kill,
    Is all in the mind.

    Submitted on 2007-03-12 09:52:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW!! The power of words is so often belittled and made light of. Words carry such weight that all the gold and all the money could not unburden a child put down by their parents or peers, a spouse made to feel ugly by the one who promised to love them forever, or the homeless struggling to find change to feed the kids that they are heartbroken they can't care for because their world has dropped out from under them.
    Words can heal they can maim they can kill or they can give grace and peace. But only if they are treated as more than meer words.

    Great write !!!!
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      clever cold and cool...
    nice write

    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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