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    dots Submission Name: Your Heartdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 534
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 562



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    dotsYour Heartdots
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    Itís been a long, long night,
    And just lying here, I think, I will,
    Try to figure out what I should do,
    Itís three A.M. and Iím stuck still,
    Thinking of that very part of you,
    That I always try to fight-
    It has a soft and quiet presence,
    That I can still hear all around,
    A sharp piercing benevolence,
    That would make me kneel down,
    So Iíll let you take this life,
    Iíll let you guide it by the hand,
    And let you make it feel the part,
    Of you that it needs to understand--




    Submitted on 2007-03-12 09:55:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I wish I were more knowledgeable in what great poetry is supposed to be, so I could give you helpful comments. I can say, however, that I really like this one. I can see you lying there, and I can feel your submission. I really like it a lot.
    | Posted on 2007-10-14 00:00:00 | by amrslamr | [ Reply to This ]
      gewd.very gewd.
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by sweetdeath | [ Reply to This ]


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