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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 536
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    He left a letter by her door,
    On her front window,
    But she never read it,
    He was so busy staring at the floor,
    For him to ever know,
    She would always regret it.

    It said
    “We’re too close,
    Too close to be just lovers,
    Or for either of us,
    To attempt to correct,
    The fact that we can’t,
    Feel each other,
    But the this ‘you and me’,
    Would be so perfect”

    He’d have lots of time to think,
    To think into it,
    And think himself out,
    But really all the time,
    He never knew,
    What he was really thinking about
    He would just walk on,
    Like a faithful little soldier,
    And move along, when ever he peered,
    Over his shoulder,
    There she was- not paying attention,
    But yet so attentive,
    And about that note,
    It hurt, but really she meant it

    They stay too close,
    Too close to be just lovers,
    Or either of them,
    To get a chance to detect,
    That they’re too far apart,
    To feel each other,
    But this distance,
    Is what makes them connect...




    Submitted on 2007-03-12 09:56:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this, i can really feel the emptiness and pain in this piece. you did a really good job portraying your emotions into this at least thats what i think. Joanna
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]


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