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    dots Submission Name: Beating the Crap Out of Your Musedots
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    Author: Colten
    ASL Info:    19/Man?lol/U of I
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 62/99/43
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Stress can be unbearable but, it is much worse when suppressed.


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    dotsBeating the Crap Out of Your Musedots
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    The tall man
    Whose age personified youth
    (aka the young man)
    Peirced the twilight
    With his gleaming stare.

    "You, fair maiden."

    He shouted through
    The dreary landscape
    Of Blank templates
    And Dying thunderstorms.

    "You, fair maiden."
    He repeated.

    The woman,
    The only light source,
    The only hope turned
    Towards the man.

    His fist connected to her jaw.
    The crack was frightening.

    "Why can't I think?
    Why can't I create?"

    He repeatedly kicked her
    And she repeatedly coughed out,

    "You won't try."

    So he cried.




    Submitted on 2007-03-12 10:00:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very original and funny! I thought it was just so creative; the innocent way you began, the shock of violence in the middle, and the suprise and return to innocence of the end. I can defenitely relate to this (inner violence) :P
    | Posted on 2007-08-13 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      it's very much you... Although I've not seen you violent, I've heard stories...also those of a fair maiden... I'll refrain from exposing every detail, for your sake. : )

    ~orange
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      I like to do the same thing to my muse every so often, but she never has a form, she's more like mist and it's extremely hard to kick the crap out of mist. Anyway, I like the originality of this write and the title definately lured me in, for I want to beat the crap out of my muse. I dig!
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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