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    Author: kma12790
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 28/41/18
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Burning, glowing
    Feel the lollipop sun beat down on you
    On the cinnamon sand
    Air laced with salinity that escaped the oceans grasp
    Bubbling, blueberry jam ocean
    Placid, tranquil waves rolling on to shore like the legato melody
    Of a baby’s sweet lullaby
    CRASH
    Repetitive, compelling
    Waves crashing onto the shore
    Like the steady beat of a tribal drum
    Like armies beginning a battle
    A beach with as many characteristics as the people who visit them




    Submitted on 2004-06-09 16:02:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wo! I like this. Fantastic imagery. Full of colourful words that beautifully highlight your poem. Nice work ..Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-06-09 00:00:00 | by Broken | [ Reply to This ]


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