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    dots Submission Name: Past...Awaydots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    hide me in the shade, a place the sun can't penetrate with rays
    take me where we'd spend our nights at the ends of summer days
    the tide will steal our depth but we will wade in shallow waves
    in a metamorphisis of age we've arranged to change our ways

    now they'll say it's "just a phase", a phrase that holds no truth
    our time's meaning is worth fighting for; it was more than wasted youth
    ill carry on my memories in photographs as proof
    moments all worth holding frozen in a photo booth

    as nuclear winter breakup falls, springs to life pictures
    once my summer love, you became a permanent life fixture
    it's a perpetual hunt i live without the pleasure or the pain
    only pray im dreaming, then we'll wake up together again

    times a river rushing past, the torrents wash away my dreams
    you and i are only passerbys just wading in it's streams
    lost and found you at last X marks your spot on my map
    treasuring your memory, forever drowning in my past




    Submitted on 2007-03-12 12:31:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "now they'll say it's "just a phase", a phrase that holds no truth"

    This part is sooo true. Great job.
    | Posted on 2013-09-29 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      this is cool man, theres certain parts here that totally fit my philosophy,
    awesome write, keep going man!!!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a awesome awesome piece. you have some talent i think this one's going on my favorites. not because the poem relates to me .
    no im adding this one to my favorites because
    your style just reached out and grabbed
    me. i wish i could write like this.. good job
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
      "the tide will steal our depth but we will wade in shallow waves"

    i love that line....

    Another very well written poem Mr. Kase!

    "lost and found you at last X marks your spot on my map" this line, while a great line, threw me a bit but i think this is a great write....well done...again :)


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    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a wonderful write, but you should put in punctuation, it will be a little easier to read. I love writes that are stories and this one is really good. I think I'll have to check out more of your work.
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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