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    Author: Rogue
    ASL Info:    15/female/California
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 133/192/47
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    Description:
       Well,.........the end of the school year has finally come. There are gonna be so many tears tomorrow. I wrote this for a friend but i wanted to dedicate this to all of my friends that I made this year and are so dear to me. I just wish that I would see them very soon, and that i don't have to wait till the first day of school again.


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    You made me smile
    tha I haven't felt in a while
    You understand me so much
    that the world understands me so little.
    This smile doesn't seem to fade
    You came with the first aid
    You've been there ever since
    You are someone I'm really gonna miss
    You're leaving this year
    And not coming back
    I'll remember everything you taught.
    I'll miss you.
    Nobody ever cared
    as much as you do.
    Thank you for being there for me
    You know my Best Friend you'll always be




    Submitted on 2004-06-09 16:04:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      AW. Nice poem. Well written. Touches that chord within you. But hey although ul miss them ul always have the memories and with technology these days its so easy to keep in touch. :)
    | Posted on 2004-06-09 00:00:00 | by Broken | [ Reply to This ]
      I like where this is coming from. I'm sure the emotions are really heart-felt. Infortunately, I couldn't really connect to what you're saying... maybe if you gave more concrete examples? Also, your use of punctuation was very erratic.
    | Posted on 2004-06-09 00:00:00 | by Erchomenos | [ Reply to This ]


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