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    dots Submission Name: oh pleasedots
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    Author: SuicidalDrug
    ASL Info:    14-f-ks
    Elite Ratio:    1.22 - 3/15/19
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 618
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 647



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    dotsoh pleasedots
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    so close to you yet so far away,
    i pray the lord, for you to stay,
    promise me you wont go away,
    "be with me" i begin to say,
    "i love you" ...means more than
    my words say.
    with so much pain and dismay.
    please god, unwind my soul, lett me be with him, and you will see, how good i can be. please oh please just let me be, be with him, let my soul run free, just make it ________ and me. I love him so, more than you know, so ________ come to me, come for me, be with me, i love you, please tell me you love me too, I will do anything to havea you in my arms forever and together.




    Submitted on 2007-03-12 16:00:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I Really Like It Keep Up The Great Work
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]
      well, the concept is good, but it needs a little work. i suggest you work on the flow and the wording the most. some parts seemed a bit repetative and scattered too. keep writing!

    `AdrienneCale
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by AdrienneCale | [ Reply to This ]


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