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    dots Submission Name: You continue longing for more.dots

    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
    Total Views: 685
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1621


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    dotsYou continue longing for more.dots

    Stricken, Oh-so poor,
    The guilt,
    By-pass reason for the sake of your desires
    pestilence upon the grave of loneliness
    showing all your past transgressions.
    Serviced needs, boating cold.
    You walk across that threshold,
    you walk and enter the dark revision.
    Eyes like rose petals painting the quite earth,
    soil born of heavens curse,
    the tricks of heart, mind, and soul
    fuse to become one remote voice,
    one remote mistake of graves built over ice,
    grant the devil morning flowers,
    paint the isles of green red again,
    bathe in blood refused to cleanse,
    and milk, milk that white pure land of its

    Stricken Oh-so poor,
    The act,
    heated in the middle of the night,
    pouring rain down upon that bed,
    where sin ebbs away your children’s breath.
    Bleed upon all that was, fearful child
    singing that old pitiful song.
    Hatred brewing under cold stares,
    and you awake to the idea of selfishness,
    doing all to make-create-the idea of happiness.

    Stricken! Oh-so very so very poor.
    The fact,
    Love is knocking, with a familiar face, on your door.
    Your memory fails you, You fail to remember.
    Seeing her face disgusted-retraced-the ideas he left behind.
    Molted flesh upon the gates of her innocence,
    Hatred melding with that perfuse liquid drowning all the more.
    Bleed, yes he Bled across the floor.
    Welcome, Welcome, you keep asking for more.

    Submitted on 2007-03-12 17:57:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I dont even know where to begin here. Its beautiful. Very well written and so thought provoking. I loved it i loved every line....very well done.

    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]

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