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    dots Submission Name: Lady Necrosisdots

    Author: Draigon
    ASL Info:    25/m/Al
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 164/196/91
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsLady Necrosisdots

    The pool of water reflects a beautiful image,
    chaotic, yet oh so magnificent.
    Streams of blood flow down from the blind,
    but all seeing eyes.
    The dead lies in shambles about her form,
    some releasing their final breaths of self pity

    Soul shattering, and earthquaking visions invoke,
    provoke a feeling of helplessness.
    Her words rip through the thin shields,
    like a serrated knife ripping through a soft fabric
    folding back a hole consumed by chaotic darkness
    flowing out and touching the faint-hearted.

    Every sin that this demon of beauty commits,
    makes the water blacken with embers of her burned heart.
    Blanketing a world full of happiness,
    with false prophets,
    satanic martyrs.
    Sealing the world in an eternal darkness,
    that absorbs God's being,
    leaving the world in hopeless despair.

    Submitted on 2007-03-12 20:02:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well this is good, when i read this all i could think about was murder and the tragedy of being alone, but these are just want i get from it, eventhough it may be far from what is is.
    Well any way good write man.
    Peace the Fuc* out.
    Keep on keeping on.
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by WonderfulComa | [ Reply to This ]
      This makes me want to cry for this fallen world. the second stanza was the most vivid for me. The imagry was really very present. It was ok, although your style is either changing or this piece didn't reflect what i've read by you.

    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]

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