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    dots Submission Name: Battle-fieldsdots

    Author: LRRolins
    ASL Info:    17/A/A world you dont own
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 142/140/84
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Political
    Total Views: 678
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       Ehh,new scream-core song.I'm not too sure about it yet,but I need some criticism to make sure it is ok..Yea,you know teh drill...Just tell me what you guys think..Remember,WE'RE RECORDING THIS SUMMER.
    <22 Lindel

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    Writing memories,I'm slowly losing this war.
    This battle has had too many casulaties,HEAVEN HELP US!!
    An ongoing bloodshed for the cause,the search of individuality - A MISTAKE IN ITSELF!!
    Chicken or sparrow?Spread your wings,let's test your will,YOUR STRENGTH!!WHO ARE YOU MOLE??!
    Plastic festuses,your unborn childern are your soldiers??You'll never win that way...
    GREEN,GREED!!GREEN,ENVY!!The cycle never ends,the blood never dries from this battlefield of our warring demons.
    There's no hope of sight of the end,I guess we'll just have to stand this out forever,dear.

    Submitted on 2007-03-12 21:56:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This wasn't really a coherent peace, with many abstract ideas in an overall theory, but that isn't nescisarily a bad thing at all. This seemed to convey hatred towards war and violence. Feeling like people are forcing kids they don't even have to be condemed to fight, fighting for the wrong reasons, all that kind of thing. I'm not a big fan of scream-core. I prefer jammy stuff, inventive and new styles ect. are what interust me. But, it was ok as far as content goes. The subject is a very clear one which alot of people feel, and you kind of get that "does it really need to be said again?" feeling. It's unlikely that classics of the same subject will ever be topped. War Pigs by sabbath, Imagine by Lennon, there's even lots of new age and hip hop songs with the same subject. I think it would be cool if you took a more unique approach on it. Hell, even black eyed peas and system of a down have equivalents.
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]

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