Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Reminds me of youdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: DAlin
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 82/137/75
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 684
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 404



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsReminds me of youdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I`m dying, I`m dying
    With tears in my eyes,
    Still waiting, still climbing
    And straying through times.

    I`m breaking, I`m shaking
    But waiting for you,
    Still running, still running...
    ...from me, much to soon.

    Emotion, a river I see
    Your eyes and a teardrop on me,
    An angel, a rose feeling blue
    Reminds me of you.




    Submitted on 2007-03-13 06:07:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      good i just like the choice of words but i just thought you would have used words that paint a mental picture of the person you are remembering love
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]
      I Really Like This...
    Your Choice Of Words Are Great They Really Bring This Poem Together
    Keep It Up xXx *Mwah* Luv Stacey
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this a lot. it doesn't specifically say who you're waiting for, which is good. it allows it to relate to more people. because most people are waiting for someone or something.
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by sarcasticmute | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    137649

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry