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    dots Submission Name: I Will Not Take to Feardots
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    Author: RequiemOfDreams
    ASL Info:    20/M/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 97/140/38
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 980
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       My first sonnet, I probably need to get each section a bit more organized but heres the first draft.


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    dotsI Will Not Take to Feardots
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    I will not take to fear of fear,
    Swirling doubts of disarray
    In my head- watch your rear
    Things beyond control always stay,
    Stand as a rock against the tide,
    A barrier of protection, of light
    But not safe, just a moment to hide,
    Although never out of sight,
    Crawling, towards a glowing field
    To stay fates hand, one must find
    The strength lost from holding the shield
    Finally, atrophy consumes the mind

    From the fear of fear we'll never be free
    But if I don't take to it, it will take to me




    Submitted on 2007-03-13 13:46:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nicely written! I really enjoyed this piece! It was fantastic!!! I thought everything was well organized and well written until the last two lines, you might want to consider re-writing it so that it is a full stanza.. then again, are sonnets supposed to end in a two-liners? I'm not sure, its just a suggestion...

    Keep writing and keep up the great work!

    *~ mist ~*
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by PrincessDoom13 | [ Reply to This ]


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