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    dots Submission Name: God(Junkie)dots
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    Author: Derrick Thomas
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 20/52/35
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 230
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1171



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       Chillax before ye read this, friend.


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    dotsGod(Junkie)dots
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    There is a secret way to hear music. People don't really hear music.

    You have to listen, but through the back of your neck. Thats where you feel it. And you love it. And you live in it, bathe in it, fuck in it, love in it, piss in it.

    And the music becomes you. It nullifies your life. It captures you. It is you. The music is you.

    The drums are in my mind.

    I guess that I just don't know.

    It holds me to the left. The violin?

    Im holding, oh lord. Im holding!

    Where can a man be free? Where can he lose himself? Where do the drums come from? (In my mind.)

    Heroin.
    Be the death of me.
    Heroin.
    Its my wife, and its my life.

    Haha!

    It squeezes me, the music does. The shredders are tearing my ears out. It warms me. In the shoulders. Beware, the shoulders are soft around here.

    Its funny how I never before knew that it was a violin.
    I felt it leave. They pulled out of my ears.

    I guess that I just know.

    Heroin.

    -God(Junkie)




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      "You have to listen, but through the back of your neck. Thats where you feel it. And you love it. And you live in it, bathe in it, [censored] in it, love in it, piss in it. "

    That group of lines is what pulled me in and made me keep reading. I was reading the whole poem with my eyebrows up to my hairline.

    This poem keeps you interested throughout the whole thing. There is no part where you get bored and want to stop. It actually makes you wish it would never end.

    This is a really well written poem and I enjoyed reading it.

    Nice Write
    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-04-09 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      Shit, man. This is really cool. I dig the way it feels. Druggie music, baby.
    Loved it.
    | Posted on 2008-02-01 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      "You have to listen, but through the back of your neck."

    I think there is an insight to this, or maybe not, but hear me. When I was but a wee lass I ise to think that our sould where in the back of our neck...I thought that if I focused and used all of my being I would discover the origin or our souls...well needless to say I was intoxicated, but I think this is funny.

    "Im holding, oh lord. Im holding!"

    This is obviously a direct pointer thingy suggesting drugs. Seems aboout right.


    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by madhatress | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good write
    You expressed yourself very well
    I know the feeling you are describing as I was addicted to meth for 5 years and had the same Love affair with music
    I have to tell you though it wasnt until I became sober
    (been sober for 2 years now)
    that I really learned to appreciate the music and the feeling it gave me even more
    I hope and pray you can escape from this terrible addiction before it controls your every breath and every beat of your Heart
    I will be Praying for you
    If you ever need someone to talk to just PM me I promise I will answer
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I like it. I might like it more without the heroin. I love the way you've described music, though...it is marvelous.
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      
    ( I'm working right now. No time to type out comment, but I will definately come back and edit this. Wonderful, by the by. I have read many of your works, not leaving a comment of course, and love your out look on the world.

    Ciao!

    -Red- )
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by LongPastDead | [ Reply to This ]
      I've been chillaxin yo! My nigga ______.
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      this was exceptionally and strangely lovely in a very contemporary and spiffy way.....
    it has a pulse to it, a throbbing beat despite the lack of defined rhyme or set rythm.
    this takes you to that place in your mind where everything is groovy and nifty and the boogey man is far far away.......

    this is a great style for you, and i really like it....

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]



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