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    dots Submission Name: Next Timedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
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       I WANT TO KILL HIM ... MAY I? PLEASE!


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    dotsNext Timedots
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    So the other night you mentioned somthing...
    You said you want to talk about my my "parting" sechudule!

    So I'm here...
    I'm home..
    I'm not intoxicated...
    I'm not under the influence of any drug..

    So lets talk!
    Oh
    NO
    Wait you can't do that
    Now can you?

    Nope...
    Your too busy

    Taking these pictures of your grand daughter..

    Or better yet your too busy...
    Giving me a smart ass grin
    As you walk that
    Nasty ass up the stairs..
    And peek in on my friend
    As she's getting dressed
    After that shower...

    Oh you don't remeber that?
    NO...

    Well I do
    I remeber all of this and
    So many other nasty things you've done...

    Things I long to forget
    But my
    Mind
    Body
    &
    Soul

    Will not allow me too

    So next time ...

    You wonder why
    I drink so much..

    Next time you wonder why I take so many DAM risks...
    Think of these thoughts...




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      f*cking hell. I thought I was mis-treated as a child...
    I know this site is cheap, but have you thought of professional help? seriously?

    It's too raw, and the more I read the more I put my hand in front of my eyes and the more I peek through the gaps.

    That's poorly, I know, but honest.

    I think, with regards to Matt's comments - the very fact he is repeating these acts makes him an abuser, not a victim.

    Those who cannot forgive and correct their pasts do not deserve pity.

    I would never dream of treating one of my own children the way I was treated.

    I'm still not sure whether this is raw, cathartic and therapeutic, - or voyeuristic and unpleasant.
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by Ben Gunn | [ Reply to This ]
      having not known the "Things I long to forget" I know it makes this easy to say; so please don't get mad at me but,
    for the good of yourself, sounds like you need to forgive an entire situation, he is obviously sick to be "Taking these pictures of your grand daughter.."
    but my guess is whats made him sick was probably not entirely his fault,
    Of course I may be wrong, he may be the devil himself,
    but this is about you and moving past.

    sorry if I sound like an ass,

    much love Matt
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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