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    dots Submission Name: The Dolphins Songdots

    Author: whendt
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 902/387/108
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Prose/
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       This is for a dear friend of mine who has been feeling down for quite some time now. She loves Dolphins, so I wrote this just for her.
    Thanks for being a friend!

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    dotsThe Dolphins Songdots

    The waves crashed softly on the shore.
    As the moon shined on the crystal blue water.
    Off in the desistance the dolphins play.

    The tropical fish dash here, and there.
    Warm air flows over your cool skin.
    Your mind slips off to the stars.

    The dolphins call you to come join.
    For a second you ponder.
    Then you let your mind wonder.

    It would be great just to be free.
    Never a care or a fee .
    So off you will go into the sea.

    Your skin turns blue.
    Like the water that’s around you.
    Off like a bullet .

    The dolphins ask where you have been.
    Then you reply” just at my ends.”
    Circle round , and just pretend.

    Your mind was at ease.
    The stars were so bright.
    Never were you so easy to please.

    The sun was coming up over the sand,
    And the dolphins said “ let me give you a hand.”
    So off you swam to never, never land.

    Now its been many, many years since you have been seen,
    But they say on a moon lit night you can hear…
    The Dolphins Song

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      Very nice, its amazing how diffrent you have progressed from the last things of yours' that I' read. It reminded me of the Modana video with her as a mermaid and then the movie I once saw about a baby raised by seals but returned to humans as an infant. I forget the name of the movie so I apologize for my cheezy explination. All for te best...
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by SarahE.P. | [ Reply to This ]
      i really enjoyed reading this. It has a very good flow, from beginning to end. I love this line "Your mind slips off to the stars.". it makes me picture her tilting her head back in the water, closing her eyes and just letting the night move her body in the water. ahh, what a nice thought to evoke. :) This line "Never a care or a fee", i am a little unsure about. i just makes me wonder what sort of fee there would be. When i read this line "So off you swam to never, never land." i thought that the poem could be ended right there and it would be perfect. The last set of lines make for a very good ending aswell, bringing it to just a little further. Very nice all in all.
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by astrangedream | [ Reply to This ]
      better and better each time i read it. i'll cherish this forever. thank you so much, babe.
    you know you're the best!
    love ya dearly,
    michelle xxxxx
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

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