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    dots Submission Name: ObsesShawndots
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    Author: babyshawn
    ASL Info:    30/f/nepa
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 354
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    Description:
       this poem is 4 and about the love of my life.
    i fell in love at age 13 and i still love him 2 this day. 17 years. through thick and thin. never will i stray


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    dotsObsesShawndots
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    death comes to all who enter
    inevitable, but true
    i always feel like dying
    whenever im without you
    the nights they seem so cold & pale
    so empty without you
    the days they seem eternal
    so long & boring without you
    the rooms become like caverns
    my barless prison cells
    i dream of when you will be near
    and i can have life without fear

    a love so strong it hurts me
    a desire so hot i shall burn
    there is no other for me
    today ive vowed never to try
    to ever replace you with another
    for i kow that i would die

    i need to smell your body
    your lips i have to taste
    i need to hear you laughing
    and see that beautiful face
    the only man who makes me smile
    would you like to know his name
    never! man, no way!
    because youll want him just the same

    Jessica Denise Butts




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