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    dots Submission Name: Aestra IIdots
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    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    25/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 647/352/64
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 411
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1489



    Description:
       In a million different ways of showing pain
    I’ve found humility hiding under the crust


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsAestra IIdots
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    Beware!

    Dead men whisper

    There is no redemption

    Dead men whisper

    There is no escape

    Dead men whisper

    There is no air

    Dead men whisper

    The sky is filled with golden hair

    Slowly flowing curves

    Burst

    Honey and infant fire

    Curve

    Supreme tension strings

    Run!

    Run above your rotting life

    Watch!

    Watch your past disintegrate

    Cry!

    Cry a million new memories

    Stop!


    Nurture this moments



    Eternity lies beyond






    Submitted on 2007-03-14 08:56:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very Nice.
    This Made me think about this time I saw a car crash and thanked "god" it wasn't me. But, I think that it was the lines

    "Run!
    Run above your rotting life
    Watch!
    Watch your past disintegrate"

    however, You did seem a little scattered.
    I like it.

    ~Carrie

    PS: THanks for your comment on ANGEL
    | Posted on 2008-05-18 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your work. Although sometimes you tend to lose focus and wander around. Here a case is a bit different. It’s like you merged your words too much. But still, it I like it.
    And one more remark, purely “cosmetical”. You should lose double-spacing between lines. I think it would look better that way.
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]


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