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    dots Submission Name: I was happy when...dots
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    Author: gothicgirl
    ASL Info:    23/f/recreant world
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 127/111/48
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 1018
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1707



    Description:
       i wrote this in hopes that i would some reason in my exsistence to live but what i found was life is to to beautiful to die speacially when your ending still has so much more to add.


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    dotsI was happy when...dots
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    I was happy when...wait was i ever.
    i think about it, maybe once? nope never.
    but i was when i was five happy as can be,
    but my unforante fate has lead to who iam, this is me?

    Looking in the mirror, i don't recconize that monster staring back
    digging deeper in my pockets, where's my God damn crack?
    you stole it huh just like my youth
    i'll smak you! just tell me the God damn truth.

    The truth about what you did, LIER!
    i know so does the world thanx for giving me fuel for my fire.
    I'am laughing, my finger wraped around the trigger of your gun
    To your head, Laugh Bitch, now this is what i call fun.

    I was happy when...i first met her gaze
    i stopped actting like being gay was just a textbook phase
    she was beautiful i must admit
    but then i got caught up in the downward spiral shit.

    Like everyone else she took leave
    and in my own depression i was left to greave.
    now she barly notices as i wave goodbye
    hoping she'll stop iggnoreing me before i die.

    I was happy when...i saw him sitting there
    i wasn't scared i walked up without a care
    it was the hello of my life i'd say
    here we are two years later without delay

    i love him still i can not lie
    but now i don't laugh with him, i cry
    i have emotions i never felt when were holding hands
    but now iam afraid of were we might stand.

    my life is not yet fully written to the end
    so i'll leave you with a finally wave goodbye,
    my friend.




    Submitted on 2007-03-14 16:58:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      like poison in my coffee...this was indeed something beautiful. the best part was the sting at the end. it remains hoepful, yet lost all together. this will be in my favorites.
    | Posted on 2007-03-18 00:00:00 | by Frivilous _ | [ Reply to This ]
      The idea is good. You have a mass amount of spelling and grammatical errors though. Some of the stanzas are off, so I suggest fixing those up. Drop me a line if and when you do this. Write on.
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngel | [ Reply to This ]


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