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    dots Submission Name: the seductive stranger is our clergyman.dots

    Author: reid kat
    ASL Info:    27/f/Co
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 279/196/34
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       It's something.

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    dotsthe seductive stranger is our clergyman.dots

    Oh little girl, the water feels so good.
    It's merry here, the sirens hum so softly.
    The water's rising, the sirens still sing,
    but I can still hear nothing.

    The preacher is coming by
    with some things he'd like to sell.
    Like Salvation for a nickle,
    but there are other things he'd rather buy.

    Oh little girl, come play in the street.
    The city is merry in its fervor.
    The sirens wail, and the city walks in its drunkeness,
    but it's quiet unless you listen.

    Something shiny for the offering plate,
    walk your hand along the rails.
    Ask the preacher to explain,
    and he'll lean down to whisper in your ear.

    Oh little girl, come meet me by the sand dunes.
    It's lovely today in August.
    Only the sea gulls notice the sirens,
    because the little girl is quiet in the sea.

    Submitted on 2007-03-14 17:22:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You're right- it IS something... Something AWESOME!!!

    "but I can still hear nothing..."

    Great stuff! I missed reading your posts while I was away. What ever happened to A Right To Bare Arms?

    Anyways- off topic; I love the theme of this and the re-occurrence of certain other themes within...
    The title definitely caught my eye, so good job there as well...
    I can offer no suggestions to this because in my opinion it's another of your perfect writes. I think you are one of those- not here for critique, because you are already accomplished... -But here for acknowledgment.
    And I so acknowledge you!!!

    | Posted on 2008-03-07 00:00:00 | by Ceyx | [ Reply to This ]

    I like it and am frightened by it at the same time.

    Prettiest part:

    "Oh little girl, come play in the street.
    The city is merry in its fervor.
    The sirens wail, and the city walks in its drunkeness,
    but it's quiet unless you listen."
    | Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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