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petals


Author: aleksandra
Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 8 /4 /5
Words: 12
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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petals



blinding and beautiful, all senses fail.
obscuring ignorance, let judgment prevail.




Submitted on 2007-03-14 21:17:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this; a) because I like short, succinct verse, as I think it takes more skill to impart precise emotion in fewer words than to bang on endlessly hoping that SOME will hit the target for SOMEbody - and b) because I would have written the last verse the other way 'round
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"obscuring ignorance, let judgment prevail" - just to fit in with the all encompassing blizzard of beauty and corruption inferred in the first line.

Fascinating and very, very good.

Peace'n'love'n'stuff

Ben Gunn
| Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by Ben Gunn | [ Reply to This ]


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