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    Author: Ygi
    ASL Info:    17/m
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 290/149/165
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 113
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    Bytes: 642



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    everyone walks their tracks up ladders
    built to escape
    the flames
    they lick our faces day to day
    you note the pain but,
    why bother everyone else when this
    is just yourself
    you hit the clock for no reason but
    your angery
    everyone wakes up late
    we've been built to escape but
    this chair is comforting me
    and it costs more than I can pay
    I'll pass the ladder and instead I'll go to work
    these steps are traced
    in sleepless nights
    bar fights
    throwing fists at our dreams
    taking pills and blowing off steam




    Submitted on 2007-03-15 01:41:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very nice, i couldn't really tell wot it was about though. It made me think of how every day i get up go to school, then to work, then go home and sleep... like my daily agenda! "this chair is comforting me and it costs more than I can pay"... that reminds me of how every thing in stores etc costs so much, yet people are paid for working so little, which in my opinion is odd. Maybe, to improve it you could do it story like, maybe in order, from morning to the end of the day. It seems like something that everyone has to deal with, haveing to work, and then relaxing and dreaming, but sometimes those can be hard on the human body and sole too, good job two thumbs up and don't stop writing *nods*


    Zack
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