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    dots Submission Name: "I Love You"dots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 512
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dots"I Love You"dots
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    I was mellow- dramatic,
    She was loud and all-out,
    I was lost, and she was found,
    In a lyrical fallout,
    See, I had words to say,
    But lost the words in the wood,
    I would delay if I wanted,
    But Id say if I could,
    'Could I? Should I?'
    It was like 'The Ghost of You'
    I could only imagine it,
    Until I finally knew,
    We should've gotten together,
    You know? Just us two,
    Because every fear I ever had,
    Eventually, came true,
    Wounds I made myself,
    Had to choose to heal,
    The skin pulled over,
    But refused to seal,
    The skin numbed itself,
    And refuse to feel,
    So I regretted and denied,
    The things I thought I used to feel,
    See, I had words to say,
    But lost the words in the wood,
    I would delay it if I wanted,
    But I would say if I could...




    Submitted on 2007-03-15 09:26:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The skin pulled over,
    But refused to seal,
    The skin numbed itself,
    And refuse to feel,
    So I regretted and denied,
    The things I thought I used to feel

    this part was my favorite ...Nice job !! I like it !!!
    | Posted on 2007-12-23 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]
      "Wounds I made myself,
    Had to choose to heal,
    The skin pulled over,
    But refused to seal,"

    I liked that because even if you can't see it, you can still feel it and feel why you did it.
    It's sad, but I like it...
    -Missy
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice poem I like it, very visual and imaginative. I like how it feels like you put your emotions towards the poem and how I felt it and if that is what you were coming across then you did it keep up the good work peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2007-03-25 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG is this for real?
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by bigothgurl | [ Reply to This ]


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