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    dots Submission Name: Beauty of the Monsterdots
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    Author: Draigon
    ASL Info:    25/m/Al
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 164/196/91
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsBeauty of the Monsterdots
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    Once upon the darkest of times,
    there was a mutant of sorts.
    He spoke in rhymes,
    and prophisied good tidings.
    His witfulness was uncanny,
    which was shone in his writings.
    Though in appearance he was mishapen,
    his words made him a thing of beauty.
    He wrote about lives made of satin,
    and about lives painted on dark canvas.
    Some of his work inspired majestic things,
    others just inspired overwhelming sadness.
    His moods went to and fro,
    from this insanity planted its seed,
    then his madness began to grow.
    As his imagination grew more crazed,
    his work became horrific.
    Now when people see him,
    their eyes turn glazed.
    Death began to fill his parchment,
    and his ink reeked of corpses.
    Damnation was his last testament.




    Submitted on 2007-03-15 11:07:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey i like this! yeah, kinda reminds me of Frankenstien.....I like how you put lives made out of satin, and lives painted on a dark canvas. yeah...good write!

    *kate
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]
      This was alright....but it definitely wasn't what I expected. I thought it was going to be more of a poem than a story.
    It was alright dude.

    Definitely was descriptive,
    "Though in appearance he was mishapen,
    his words made him a thing of beauty.
    He wrote about lives made of satin,
    and about lives painted on dark canvas.
    Some of his work inspired majestic things,
    others just inspired overwhelming sadness.
    His moods went to and fro,
    from this insanity planted its seed,
    then his madness began to grow."

    I mean...you used good descriptive words, and it all made sense...but, I don't, see if you can use more metaphors or something.
    Not bad.
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by Strator | [ Reply to This ]


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