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    dots Submission Name: Sleeping Away Dreamsdots
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    Author: Strator
    ASL Info:    22/M/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 160/142/67
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 730
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsSleeping Away Dreamsdots
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    Sleep my darling, make your dreams more real,
    a little sleep here, and little more death in there.
    No one stands a chance at all.

    Each night I prayed for sleep to come, for guidance...
    some sort of sign.
    Falling asleep with the windows open, hoping to reach the stars.

    Midnight I've fallen fast asleep...thinking of the day away....gone.
    Daylight I can't remember anything, all a memory.
    So many questions that get in the way...
    About the place I keep sleeping awake...no more dreams.

    So my darling...sleep for me, as I sleep awake...waiting,
    Hoping for my dreams...to come back to me.





    Submitted on 2007-03-15 12:38:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oooooh i like this one. looking for guidance in our subconscious.

    "Falling asleep with the windows open, hoping to reach the stars."

    mmm i can almost feel the warm summer air.

    ~shadow
    | Posted on 2007-03-18 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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