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    dots Submission Name: When you fight dots
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    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWhen you fight dots
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    Peace and tranquilaty
    Lost at the very sound
    The breaath quickens
    Then the heart starts to race
    Through all the caos
    ONe sound stood out
    It was her voice
    That scream
    Shooting out with all mighty power
    The magnitude of it all
    Seemed to pause
    As she finally realized
    This is my family?
    This is what were made of?
    Screaming and yelling
    Stop!STOOOOP!
    The screamer cryed
    PLease stop
    A lonely tear rolled down her check
    As it fell to the floor
    A drop of blood splatered
    No one had paid attion to her actiond
    And now the drop made a chain reaction
    Stoping it, to late
    If only your screams would have already broken
    You would have seen
    Her last breath
    Wasted on word
    Stop!




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