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    dots Submission Name: Perfectdots
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    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       My boyfriend does not know how I feel about myself and this is why I don't liike it when he tells me or wants to touch my body. I am not perfect enough. Not yet.


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    Breath heavy
    Feeling so vulnerable
    Every touch by you makes my body shake
    Craving you
    Can't help but make a sound
    Silence isn't an option
    Every touch of your lips upon mine
    Makes me want you more
    Temptaion buliding
    Anticipation buliding
    Until i can't take it no more
    And we kiss more passionately
    Then a voice pops into my head
    The same one every time
    The one that stops us
    And I lie saying I am "not ready"
    It is the voice that say's
    "NOT PERFCET"
    I am not perfect enough for you
    My body is not right
    "please don't?"
    I ask in a voice that breaks are rhythm
    I have scares and fat
    Touch them
    They are gross
    And yet you say "I love every part of you"
    I don't understand?
    Why?
    I am not perfect




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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes, self-hatred is the worst kind of hate. And I too well know the feeling of being faced with this situation. In all honesty though, even in perfection there is flaw, nothing is perfect, no one is perfect. From what I have read, you are definately worth more than that, and I am sure that that is what your boy friend sees. As hard as it might be for you, you should try to see it aswell.
    There are some spelling and grammatical errors that should be fixed, it just helps with the flow and rythm, other than that it is well done, great job.

    ~hannah~
    | Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by seriouscutter19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Self-hatred is the worse kind of hate. But I'm sure that you do love some things about yourself. Your boyfriend loves you for the inside not the out. He sees the real you. Perfection isn't all it's cracked up to be. Again there are some grammar mistakes but nothing a quick proof read couldn't fix :)

    Take care:)

    ciao,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2007-04-20 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      im right there with you. i love my boyfriend but hate myself. and he doesnt understand that. poeple never understand why other people hate themselves. i'll let you in on a secret. you may not be perfect, no one is. but you are worth it. you are worth everything and dont let anyone, not even that mean little voice in your head tell you different.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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