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    dots Submission Name: Nights Towerdots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsNights Towerdots
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    Foundation of the soul
    poured concrete slabs
    of sad states
    and forgotten fates
    mixed with love and hate
    and scraped smooth
    for appealing eyes
    Bones build high
    snap like wood under
    heavy skies
    on your shoulders held
    the wieght of your families name
    don't blame my mortality
    for the mud on your face
    we all move at a pace separate
    space is my playground
    the world sneezed me out a long time ago
    an astetic allergy
    my dander too strong to belong
    a mute mans song
    I fall upon deaf ears
    and dance for the blind
    I am the tower in the endless night
    you can't see me
    hear me
    but you know that I'm there.





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