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    dots Submission Name: In Vaindots

    Author: BusterLILblock
    ASL Info:    21/F
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 452/270/50
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 1106
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 498

       I wrote this is anger, but i guess my anger is pretty mild.

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    dotsIn Vaindots

    We talk too much
    with empty mouths

    We run too fast
    with no speed

    We touch
    with no feeling

    We hear too much
    by not listening

    Our joy exceeds
    with no pleasure

    Our soul lives
    with no life

    Were taught so much
    but learned nothing

    The minuites we waste
    with no time

    Until the end
    we'll waste in vain.

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    ||| Comments |||
      we shrug judgment
    from our shoulders
    like heavy slabs of granite

    is not in our vocabulary

    Just my thoughts in response to yours.

    | Posted on 2010-06-28 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      You certainly are singing to the choir, I have to agree with the feeling of hopelessness to it all. Everyone is just some gingerbread cut-out of someone else, and there are only 58 people in the world. Yes. Why be anything or anybody, somebody else has probably already been you and done it better anyway.
    | Posted on 2009-10-07 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      tis the elegy of every poet. good 1.
    | Posted on 2009-05-28 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]
      coool I wrote something like this, but this is soo much more awesome...
    "We hear too much by not listening"
    I liked that, reminds me of rumors and unintended lies among other things...
    "Our joy exceeds with no pleasure"
    really, really...I like all of it... : )
    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by coloredstone | [ Reply to This ]
      yepz nice poem mannn...

    me likes de wordsssssssss

    peace out yaaaaaaaaaaaaar
    | Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      lol very nice..very thought provoking :) but i would recommend changing "We hear too much by not listening" to something with "with" because the "by" breaks the parallelism in the poem.
    | Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by Keller | [ Reply to This ]

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