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In Vain

Author: BusterLILblock
ASL Info:    21/F
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Words: 76
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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I wrote this is anger, but i guess my anger is pretty mild.

In Vain

We talk too much
with empty mouths

We run too fast
with no speed

We touch
with no feeling

We hear too much
by not listening

Our joy exceeds
with no pleasure

Our soul lives
with no life

Were taught so much
but learned nothing

The minuites we waste
with no time

Until the end
we'll waste in vain.

Submitted on 2007-03-15 17:03:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  we shrug judgment
from our shoulders
like heavy slabs of granite

is not in our vocabulary

Just my thoughts in response to yours.

| Posted on 2010-06-28 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  You certainly are singing to the choir, I have to agree with the feeling of hopelessness to it all. Everyone is just some gingerbread cut-out of someone else, and there are only 58 people in the world. Yes. Why be anything or anybody, somebody else has probably already been you and done it better anyway.
| Posted on 2009-10-07 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
  tis the elegy of every poet. good 1.
| Posted on 2009-05-28 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]
  coool I wrote something like this, but this is soo much more awesome...
"We hear too much by not listening"
I liked that, reminds me of rumors and unintended lies among other things...
"Our joy exceeds with no pleasure"
really, really...I like all of it... : )
| Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by coloredstone | [ Reply to This ]
  yepz nice poem mannn...

me likes de wordsssssssss

peace out yaaaaaaaaaaaaar
| Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
  lol very nice..very thought provoking :) but i would recommend changing "We hear too much by not listening" to something with "with" because the "by" breaks the parallelism in the poem.
| Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by Keller | [ Reply to This ]

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