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OUR SIN


Author: GoKart Mozart
Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 131 /93 /49
Words: 103
Class/Type: Lyrics /Longing
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this is a poem/lyrics (partial, anyway) that i wrote when i lived...elsewhere...last year...it works if you sing it to the tune of that...i bbelieve it was a nickelback *yech* song.....what was it??? *ponders* far away? so far away? (8)and now that you're here, so far away...(8)
yeah, that song...enjoy


OUR SIN


We restart like this-
How much did we miss?
My mind keeps racing back to then…
How have you been?
And is this a sin?
It must be, for it’s utter bliss

And somehow you’re here,
Yet so far away…
How am I going to make it through the day?
Without you with me
I just cannot be…
What are all the people going to say?

I don’t know what to do,
I’m here without you,
And I can’t be all alone again…
And to recall our sin
I just think back to then
And I can still remember when…




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  Hmmm.......definitely 'pretty'.

So you made a song like thing with a canadian tune........I never thought this day would come.


Anywho, this was good, perhaps it would be better if you made it longer and added on to it because when you read it in the same tune, it leaves you expecting more, or atleast it did to me.


Zach
| Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
  I think it's pretty. I couldn't make it go to the tune of "Far Away," but it's still pretty.

"I don’t know what to do,
I’m here without you,
And I can’t be all alone again…"

My favorite part.
| Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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