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    dots Submission Name: Photographdots

    Author: AutumnLeaves
    ASL Info:    26/f/ Cyprus
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 95/103/44
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Just a light little poem.

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    The breeze warns you,
    Pours out those whispers

    “stay still”

    And you do

    “but not so still”

    And you become uneasy

    “mark this beauty”

    And you rise the lens

    “with your mind”

    And you lower the eye

    “there you have it”

    And there it is,
    So beautiful
    So hidden
    And such a wonder.
    A wonder of your own.
    Until you take the shot.

    Submitted on 2007-03-15 18:49:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      MAria, the undercurrent of this is intriguing... the thought of nature or the muse in communion with the artist on a personal level until the work of art or the moment is captured and then shared. But the moment is changed and will never be the same for anyone else as it was for the artist. I really can't comment on it structurely since the structure is sort of dialogue and very much a plain spoken, where does my breath fall, sort of poem. Nice thought though.
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by DavidHirt | [ Reply to This ]

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