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Submission Name:
No Mistakes
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Author:
just an angel
ASL Info:
17/F/FL
Elite Ratio:
3.89 - 95/109/59
Words:
62
Class/Type:
Poetry/Misc
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No Mistakes
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Ignorance is bliss
Like that one last kiss
Never felt again
Gone from now and then
Forgive and forget
Like that last regret
Erased from the mind
Don't look behind
Tomorrow is another day
Like that last leeway
One more chance to trip
Then whipe up that slip
We will continue to erase
All things needed to be replaced
Submitted on 2007-03-15 19:48:40
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it seems like more could be added also the rhyming seems a bit forced, but in my own poetry thats common also so i know first hand its hard to avoid all in all i enjoyed this post but still believe it could be added on
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