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Here Of All Places


Author: Keiran
ASL Info:    20/M/NZ
Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 40 /47 /33
Words: 302
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Sometimes life just gets on top of you. But there's always someone there to get you up again.

Love you guys.

~Keiran~


Here Of All Places



Here you are again
Here of all places
Your standing on the edge
Between sunshine and shadow
Despair fills the air


Crimson lights and starry nights
Alone under moon or sun
All you want to do is run
Run and run, far from here
Here of all places


Deserted by fate
Friends fled in hate
Despisers stay here
Here of all places


Modus Operandi you cry
Must maintain
Through it all I will not fall
Here of all places


The shadowy vault of your soul
Wherein lies your hurt and grief
There you dwell
In your little dark cell


Circumstance is but chance
Failure to fly, oh so high
Grounded again, not knowing how it feels to soar.......to soar
So here you are again
Here of all places


Run down again and again
Hounds of depression
Making their impressions
Sold out for love, or just for the money
Passion everlasting, maybe not so


Here of all places
Where do you turn


Your friends do not need you like you need them
They are already on the mend
But you are still here
Maybe an ending
They say death is but the beginning
Where better to find out
Then Here of all places


All you need on this cold and dark night
Is one shining knight
One pinprick of light
It would all be alright


You search evermore, heart and soul and strength
Here of all places you find it
On the edge of life or death


Oh to soar above chance
To know those heights of hope
To know no need unfulfilled
My darkest fear would be killed


All you need tonight

Here of all places............




Submitted on 2007-03-15 20:10:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  My first impression of this piece is that it is song lyrics. It sounds like it needs a guitar backing it up to me... especially with the occasional rhyme you use. When I think about it as being to music, I have less problem with the line lengths in some areas. The use of repition also make me think of lyrics. The only line that I think I have issues with is:
"In the darkest pit of hell that is your life"
To me this line seems to come out of no where and throws off the whole feel of the piece, for me. You had me moving with you, feeling your flow, and then, It's like you picked up a folding chair and hit me over the head, or slapped me in the face. And maybe that is the effect you were going for. I don't know, but that is the impression I got from that part of the piece.
| Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by DavidHirt | [ Reply to This ]


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