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Any empathy or all apathy?

Author: Ben Gunn
Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 62 /84 /40
Words: 95
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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renamed and re-issued cos dammit- I like attention.

Any empathy or all apathy?

Sometimes I know,
I'm not going to make it
and I cant handle
My future 'cos I've fucked up my past.

So I'm going to live my Rock
and Roll lifestyle now-
And take all the risks I have to.

Sometimes I know,
I'm far too weak to
handle anything - without support
Drink, Drugs or Friends I suppose.

So I'm going to live my Rock
and Roll lifestyle now-
And take all the risks I have to.

Sometimes I know,
I'm digging my own grave...

Ben Gunn 16.03.86

Submitted on 2007-03-15 22:56:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really like the work, but it is rather depressing. The poem itself is good, repition works here. However the topic is sad. I believe in living for the moment while thinking about the future. Realize that no one action can dictate your entire future.
| Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by DeeBaby6389 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this one a lot! I can totally relate, the past always haunts you. Bring me the drugs and booze, and I am one happy son of a [censored]. I like the simplicity in the makes the poem more straight forward, which is great. Good work.
| Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by Frivilous _ | [ Reply to This ]
  “Sometimes I know,
I'm digging my own grave...”

Choosing rock and roll life style with the drugs and drinking is digging your own grave, sure it’s cool careless and apathetic but have a little empathy to your life...Your past has nothing to do with your future and that’s not an excuse to give up on a decent life .. chosing the easy way destroys it …anyway about your poem , I liked the repetition in it and the title , you've put it in the right type : being a teen ...nice work
| Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]

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