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    dots Submission Name: Tug-A-War "Part Two"dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Story/Depressed
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       Sigh... its becoming more and more noticable that I'm back in the middle as I have been for a while just latly.. its so noticble


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    dotsTug-A-War "Part Two"dots
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    Here I am...
    Stuck in the middle yet again
    Nothing I can do about it
    Suck it up...
    Life goes on

    Do I keep these secrets from you
    Do I tell you what he said about you

    May I tell you what she told me you said?

    Can you please STOP?
    Stop telling me all these things I should not know...

    Please don't give me a chance to run away from all this

    Allow me to deal with it!

    Moving out isn't the answer..
    Pushing him away..
    Isn't going to make things better...

    Stop wearing those blinders
    Stop ignoring her as you have been

    She deserves attention as well
    She is human just like the rest of us.

    We're playing tug-a-war...
    You're draining me..
    All my engery..

    Slowly but truely..

    I can only go back and forth...
    I can only break so many times..

    Until..

    SNAP!!!

    There is no more next time...




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      If I am clear about this it's you between your parents right.
    That being the case, they are them you are you and you cannot fix one for the other or change who they are. Do not let their bitterness for each other destroy you.

    They will forever wage war with one another,.

    You have waged enough war within yourself to last you three lifetimes.
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice, I like the bit where you SNAP! as if you've really got angry and shouted at them or something, lol. Anyway, another good write, and yes I'm still stalking =p
    | Posted on 2007-05-03 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is very well written. usually i wanna shoot myself when i read poems about this because they're so dramatically worded. but this captured the confusion and frustration perfectly and i liked it quite a lot.

    emily
    | Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]


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