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    dots Submission Name: he always enters stage leftdots

    Author: Yariel Alvarado
    ASL Info:    18/M/OK
    Elite Ratio:    1.34 - 10/2/16
    Words: 434
    Class/Type: Prose/Nostalgia
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    dotshe always enters stage leftdots

    'I cant tell if you laughing, between each smile there's a tear in your eye'

    This is the moment when the lights go out. You see that nothing you coulda ever thought of coulda worked for, coulda wanted, coulda needed will help you now. The darkness that comes so perfectly clear, to each sense like a wave bearing down on a child, unlearned in the arts of the seas. You can only be helpless so long. You can only be scared for this instance. He can see in this darkness, you know hes been in the whole longer than you've been breathing, but hes charming. He smiles and he holds her tighter than steal embraces the mold. And he is sweeter, sweeter than death . AND it f e e l s right.

    The sky aint that big and the earth doesnt stand still long enough for the celestial snipers to not hit one with their endless beams from rifles long silenced. In them i saw you in each silenced battle, in some remote corner of the heaven I saw you. The light that hits only millions of lightyears after the fact. the pain that only strike when the deed is done.

    And he knows your heart beats beyond your control. Oh hes a lover Oh hes a fighter Oh hes a cold calculator waiting to take your heart beyond the moon, into orbit in oxygen dead space. To still the beating, to calm the hoping and wish you silence... Oh love wont you take this step, the one you know is just that bit too far... Oh love wont you fight for me... oh dear, that bullet was mine.

    She knew she knows.

    It matters not wheather conquest arises from compact or conquest the great Orator once declared. In this field of battle the same holds true. And he enters from behind from the blind spot out of the sun and upon your shoulders his knees caress with gravities wieghty blow. Floor you with a kiss, my shame on him. But that blade aint false, and she wields it well. He falls short of his prey, this time. She was the better off. he knicked her. she tore through his throat, took the jugulare clean out.

    'You cant always win. In the dark, in that uncertain realm, its all or nothing. That winged boy mighta blindsided me with a well placed bolt or three, but I aint out -this duel is to the death.'

    Love is just the begining.

    Submitted on 2007-03-16 15:22:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There are some wonderful images and, beautiful lines scattered through-out this, however, I found it a little incoherent in places... Like you are skipping around in your thoughts a little to much... The He to me is also a little unclear sometimes it sounds like a person and sometimes He sounds like a little more than fleash. All-in-all, it is long but a pretty deceint write.
    | Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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