Description: Advice is welcome. I feel like this one rhymes far to often. But I'll put it up anyway.
~Keiran~
Owe It All -------------------------------------------
I saw you crying
Capturing my fears
With your fallen tears
I saw you crying
I stood on top of the world
And couldnt help but fall
I never hit the ground
I never heard that sound
You taught me how to fly
Come visit me in the sky
Someone said it wouldnt last
I pray that it will
I never want to miss this feeling
I want to soar forever
You're all I have
You're all that is keeping me up
I cannot dream without you
I cannot see without you
Whatever you want
I want it to
Wherever you are
Ill be there for you
I heard you laughing
My soul lifted at that sound
It keeps me off the ground
I heard you laughing
I watched from the wall
Waiting for your call
Waiting for the day
When I could come and pay
For what you did and what you do
I owe it all to you
This is great the only part that threw me off was this stanza
[I watched from the wall ]
Waiting for your call
Waiting for the day
When I could come and pay
For what you did and what you do
I owe it all to you
I watched from the wall
that just threw me off of a great read
everything after that line is good.
Thats just my opinion though you do what you want to.
This person you have written about sounds like they have opened your heart.
And made you feel good from the inside out
I hope you have let the person who you wrote this for read it
Submission Name: Owe It All
