the hate inside of me
grows by the second
it is difficult
to hide the obvious
the voice makes my skin crawl
I cringe at the sound
it makes we want
to scream and shout
and it makes me want
to cause pain
no matter what I say
no matter what I try to do
it will always be there
I will always think about it
in utter disgust
I pitied it
and I tried to deal with it
but nothing changed
the anger continued to build up
until the pain was unbearable
I could not hide what I felt
I exploded
now
the pity has disappeared
all that is left
is the hate
the pain
the anger
and the disgust
To be honest, it sounded a little over-angsty. Just a pure rant full of rage and hatred. Is that what it was meant to be?
There were lines in which I could devote my mind to understanding, but then again, there were others that didn't seem to gain that understanding.
For examples:
I understood this line quite well.
the hate inside of me
grows by the second
it is difficult
to hide the obvious
the voice makes my skin crawl
I cringe at the sound
And then I'd keep reading, and lose it in lines like this:
I will always think about it
in utter disgust
I pitied it
and I tried to deal with it
but nothing changed
What did you mean by "it"? The piece went from explaining the pain and anguish you feel, to personifying...what? I'm confused.
Submission Name: Disgust
