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    dots Submission Name: trying to let godots
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    Author: crazy_83
    ASL Info:    28/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 27/29/18
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotstrying to let godots
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    simply gone
    i try to believe
    maybe its not destined
    maybe we're just not meant to be

    slowly healing
    why cant you just pick up the phone
    your always here with me
    but i was always alone

    struggling to hold on
    to a love not meant for me
    why did you give me your heart
    if you knew we could never be

    your my deepest love
    the pain cuts down to my core
    im trying to let go
    but i only want you more

    what hurts the most
    is letting go
    seeing what could have been
    but now we will never know




    Submitted on 2007-03-17 02:22:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is very good. the pain is so real in it that it takes you a minute to feel again. this was well done. Joanna
    | Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice poem of love and angst! You have a developing talent that shows clearly in this well developed poem! Nice work!
    | Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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