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    dots Submission Name: Unidots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsUnidots
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    My home, a broken star
    I wish that I could see
    A further way to shores
    Where I could always flee
    And just as starlight withers
    And all the worlds grow pale
    This frail galactic flower
    As far away will sail
    And I will always travel
    Always to my star
    Where all the flowers water
    Martyrs from afar
    I will lay exhausted
    Remember of my heart
    A poem away a galaxy
    My Nova from the start
    A teardrop will awelcome
    My night, a petal bed
    A milky way of ink
    A universe unread
    As all the lights lay to sleep




    Submitted on 2007-03-17 02:58:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh my.... If this isn't classic P... The peice had natrual flow, and it kept my interest throughout, the diction has a pavlovian effect on me. You again stand out as a gleaming star among the distant night. Brava.

    Acid
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by Acid | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, this IS incredible! A great poem, classic in every regard. I love this BEST OF ALL YOUR POEMS! Just so excellent, perfect meter and inspired rhyme...brilliant, exceptional...I loved it, absolutely loved it (as Oliver said: "more, more please'") BRAVO!!! BRAVO!!! BRAVO!!! Michael
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      She writes? She writes! Finally.
    Hey wait, it rhymes. . Anyhow glad you've returned to the genre you obviously belong in, fantasy. Given my brain something to run for, at least, but I realise I don't recognise "galctic". Is it supposed to be "galactic".
    The Universe bows to you oh Porcelaine one!
    Keep writing, and blowing our minds away.
    Cheers always
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]


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